The email is OK, but if you come up with the ideas about your business dreams, it can impress more.
I really feel that some of your sentences make that you are a good conversationalist, but still, you need to be more effective in terms of technical details to display your high-end zeal towards the business.
Mail to send to My Future CO- Founder!
My Co-Founder!
I know you’re on the Earth and you also have big dream to become business success like me. Daily day, when you wake up, you alway try and try to find someone to start-up, never give up. Nowaday, although I don’t know who you are, but i belive you’ll read this mail. I hope we’ll meet together as soon as. WHERE ARE YOU NOW, MY FRIEND?

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